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| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Way behind!  OVERALL IMPRESSION - A little creepiness going on in this one as your main character is adamant to make this little deal. WHAT I LIKED BEST - The white hand with the blood red nails, that was enough to send my sense reeling as to what would come of this. PLOT~ Trevor is desperate to make a deal, and totally dismisses the sound advice that kicks the story off. He agrees to do anything in return for being free, never realizing until it is too late that his freedom has a huge cost and he is totally being set up. Good job relaying all of that in your Daily Flash. CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~ Trevor who wants his freedom and is willing to pay any price. The hidden voice who coaxes him to sign the paper in blood, only to then give him a heads up as to what that will entail. Trevor was so consumed with himself he could not see what a bad deal he was making, and then he even moves closer. He is totally snowed and thinks his wife will be the one to lose, but in the end, it is he. Nice set up of this playing out in the alley. Nothing good ever happens in a darkened alley. DIALOG~ The dialogue worked well, moving the story forward. There was the hint of creepiness as Trevor spoke to the voice. The voice was very direct, pulling him in even further and getting what they want in the end. Nicely done!   
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