Yep, me again, here for another anniversary review. It appears that, to my delight, you have added more horror since the last time I stalked your port.

The hook
Knowing that this is horror, right away I was wondering what Samuel was going to do to Mischa. I suspected that maybe there would be an obsession of sorts, especially since he was peeking into the backyard of the Russian boy every now and then. So, I did want to read on to see what was going to happen.

Dialogue
Dialogue is done well, without the overuse of "he said". The beginning dialogue seems kind formal for a couple of teenage boys, but then again the Russian boy speaks English as a second language, so he is likely to be more formal in speech, trying to speak exact English. Then again, he uses the slang "Yeah" later, which is less formal.

Character development
There is some decent character development here. We know that this poor Samuel has a crush on this young Russian boy. Speaking of the Russian boy, for being so old, wouldn't he act older than his years. Seems like that would make sense and would add to the plot.

Scenery
Scenery is given just enough to show the story, without boring the reader. I imagined a mundane neighborhood. Then towards the end, the showing of the story with things like candles gives the scene a frightening feel.

Plot
I felt that this was an interesting story and the ending was a surprise. One thing that I did notice is that most of the story is told from Samuel's POV, but you switch to Mischa's POV with inner thoughts toward the beginning. That part tripped me a little because I was absorbed into Samuel's perceptions.

Final thoughts
This was an intriguing read with a creative plot. I enjoyed it.

Thank you for sharing your writing. I've enjoyed stalking your port.















My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .