Yep, here again for more horror filled stories. This story was intriguing. I kept reading to see what that tapping was.

The hook
I must admit that that first line did grab me, but for the wrong reasons. This being horror, I took it in the literal sense of the food actually speaking to the character. Yet, it became obvious that this was a metaphor for either indigestion or a tummy ache. Since milk is often used to help both issues, you might want to clarify which one it is through a bit of imagery. Maybe describe the acid coming up in her/his throat for indigestion, or the burning in his/her tummy.

Dialogue
There is only inner dialogue, which expresses the main character's thoughts. This is done well and seems to be realistic to the situation.

Character development
There is an issue with whether the main character is female or male. Being that you use "I" and you are female, I assumed the character might be. So, when she looks in the mirror seeing the woman in the reflection, I assumed it was her own reflection that feared her. Then it was clarified that this was not the case after reading the sentences after the first introduction to the woman in the mirror.

Other than that, the main character is realistic. Most of us, whether we are male or female, would react in such a way to a strange tapping.

Scenery
Scenery descriptions are limited, but there is just enough to tell the actions of the story. You avoid long drawn out descriptions that are irrelevant to the plot.

Plot
The plot was interesting. I did want to keep fallowing that tapping. The conclusion was one of horror, which made it a great ending, in my opinion.

Final thoughts
I enjoyed your story and was hooked from beginning until the end. Hopefully at some time you will get around to adding some edits. When you do, make sure to let me know and I will up my rating according to repairs.

Thank you for sharing your writing. I've enjoyed my time in your port.














My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .