Hi ~ Aqua ~ } ! It's me, Jayne, and I'm reviewing your item: " Rotting Inside ". I'm here as part of my Wodehouse Challenge.

Before I provide any critique, I'd like to point out that in order to provide consistent, fair reviews, my star rating are only based on objective items, such as following form, language used, grammar and spelling, etc. I provide my subjective opinion along the way, consisting of how I enjoyed the poem and my overall feelings towards the piece. Please look at the entirety of my comments below, and use what you feel applies.

Rating

Objective star rating: 5 - and it's not just bc you're you, though I give you you yourself a 5-star rating as well . I can find nothing to change or anything out of place.

Subjectively: I like it just as much subjectively as it scored objectively. This poem is really special, and I hope you know that. It is indeed rare that I would remember a poem in it's entirety (though I have not memorized it, there is something from each stanza that I'm sure to recall at some point).


My Overall Impression


This is so beautifully written, haunting, and soul-clenchingingly polished, I'm not entirely sure I'm even qualified to review it. It is not breath-taking. It is breath-stealing. It took me a moment to recover after I'd finished reading it.

Creativity, Concept, Theme and Use of Prompts* *if any prompt was mentioned

I especially enjoyed: Your use of the prompt (which I believe was the picture, though you don't indicate in your notes if it was). It is so very fitting.

Structure, Meter, Form, Rhythm and Flow

I especially enjoyed: .It reads beautifully, both silently and aloud. It's one of those poems for a dark, broody day or when you really want to get someone's skin to tingle (especially if you show them the picture with it).

Language, Words, Grammar, Spelling, Length and Sharpness

I especially enjoyed:

I can't find a word out of place to even suggest changing. Each is so carefully placed and put together with the line before and after...it is certainly worthy of it's awardicon and it's publication (which sadly gave me a 404 error ). It perfectly conveys the message of what bottling up emotions will lead to in the long term.

I'm having difficulty picking out one line or stanza over another in terms what I like best, since I pick one and then decide that the next is equally good.

I will settle on this:



But rest assured I like it as much as what is before it (in it's entirety).

Final Thoughts

I know I've given you no real critical feedback that would suggest you work on the piece, however, there is nothing I would change - not a word, not a comma, not a line break. This for me was a true 5-star.

If you have any questions, please email me.

JS