Hello Caerlynn


Disclaimer:
These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful and disregard the rest {/b}

Congratulations on your Open House.
This is an Angel Review.



I like the story line. I love to read stories about Avalon.

She began to row her little boat in the direction it came from. Her oars made no sound as she glided toward a fallen tree. Its bare branches reminded her of the skeleton she’d seen once hanging from a barren tree when she traveled north with her father.
Good description.


A good written story for flash fiction. I could see the story unfold as I read it. The plot moves at a great pace. The setting is good.

It lacks character description, which is hard to do in flash fiction. When Alys blinked, in the first paragraph, what color are her eyes? Maybe something about Myrrdin's long grey beard while he is pulling the boat ashore or something about a staff when he telling Alys about getting an audience with The Lady. Are you referring to the Lady of the Lake?


No suggestions other than what I stated above.



A well written story, would love to read more about it if you ever decide to write more to it.
Thank you for sharing your story. Keep on writing!


Gypsy Ann

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