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 | The Bloody Mouse  [13+] The World is taken over by the Happy mouse, but he isn't happy anymore.  |
| (4.0)| Bon jour, Nomad! This is really different. I know you have it under the genres Dark, Political, and War, but I think you could replace one of those with 'Comedy', since the idea of Mickey Mouse taking over the world just seems way too funny to me! Sorry. I know (think) you were trying to be somewhat serious with this, or at least your writing style seemed pretty serious, but it's just a little too far-fetched for my imagination. But that's one thing I liked about it; you must have one wild imagination to come up with something like this! Cool ending, too! A couple of tiny comma niggles you might want to check: 'Throughout the world(,) Freedom Fighters, known as "TomorrowMen"(,) fought...' Kee ponw ritin gon, Nomad, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here! PS-You might want to get your biography set up so we can know a little something more about you (hobbies, favorite authors/books, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course. PPS-Since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies" to get a feel of Writing.Com and introduce yourself to the community!
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