Hello SolSoleil



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These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful and disregard the rest

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An interesting title. It gives depth to your poem. It lives up to my expectations as well. The rhythm of your poem moves at a good pace. And each line flows nicely into the next. However, some punctuation would help with the rhythm and flow.

There is a message with your poem, you let someone into your life and they destroyed you and everything around you. There is power in this piece. I didn't notice any cliches.

You once told me to Wake Up
You told me I was Sleeping
But you've just been a shambling corpse
Devoid of dimension

These lines are interesting to me.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann

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