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"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Please, remember that you are the best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever I say, whether positive or negative, is just my opinion! Hi, River here and I'm reviewingBits and Pieces I found this piece in your port. What Attracted Me to Your Story: I'm reviewing this story as part of the MHWA Monthly Mental Health Challenge in hopes of getting to know my fellow challengers better. I was attracted by the cover graphic and the intro! Overall Impression: The opening sentence was the perfect hook. This story was well written and fascinated me to the end. The action kept building with no interruption to the flow. What an amazing finish. I wasn't expecting a rat. I think the rat being in the box with the head made it even more horrifying to me. The ending left me wondering what Alexa's reaction will be when she walks into that mess... Character Development: Rebekah as the main character came across as cold-blooded and fixated on completing her gruesome task of chopping up her husband's body despite the distraction of the noises coming from the box. You did an excellent job of showing us how insane she was. A good example of “show, don't tell” My Favourite Part: Her neck broken, she was unable to move. As her own life-force faded, she watched the young rat crawl over her husband’s head and scurry away. Final Thoughts: Too bad you missed the deadline for Screams, I'm sure this would have taken 1st place. Thank you for sharing. This is one of the best horror stories I've read in a while. I'm giving this a 5rating. Please Note: This review isn't meant to be "fluff". I can find no errors or suggestions to improve. Write On The Blue Angel aka River ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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