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Hi, Char. My name is River and I'm reviewing Dawn Of The Cheez-Its

What Attracted Me to Your Story: The title and the image of that red Cheeze-Its box. Of course I'm reviewing this for number 13 of the MHWA Monthly Mental Health Challenge.

Overall Impression: I chose this piece because I need a bit of humour today.

The first paragraph grabbed my attention. It was a realistic description of the morning routine at countless workplaces. I was hooked and knew I would read to the end.

I loved this wild adventure, laughing out loud in several places. I could vizulise the new dance craze created by Edward as he had a seizure on the table.

I thought this story was well written and very entertaining.

Great ending!

Dialogue: The dialogue reflected the mood of the situation, a riot in the making, and helped move the story along.

Character Development: Wow! You did a great job building the bored workers of the morning into crazed fiends on a Cheeze-Its rampage.

My Favourite Part: His eyes rolled into the back of his head and he began seizing up right there on the table, starting a new dance craze.

Things that impressed me: Your willd imagination and the ability to make me laugh.

Final Thoughts: Thanks for the laughs!

Write On

The Blue Angel aka River

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