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| (3.5)| Hello Ren, I enjoyed reading your story. I am no expert and what's following is my humble review which you may choose to ignore.   My favorites parts: I liked the feelings that Margo had towards her neighbor and the fact that it didn't change even after knowing the truth about her. I liked the courage she displayed when Elise is threatened and stood by her all through. And I loved what Elise did to Stephan.  Characters: Both the characters were well formed. Though we don't know about there physical traits, age, features and other things, but we were made clear about their emotions and feelings.  StoryLine/Plot :The story line was simple but had the suspense in it. Even after Elise's truth was revealed, the interest remained. This is an interesting plot.  Action/Flow : The flow was smooth though there were places where it could have been smoother. When changing scenes its better to put more space between paragraphs. Then there was a scene when the two ladies came to Magro's house. Then in the next sentence they were in Elise's kitchen. May be I got that wrong.  Ending: The ending was okay though I am not sure about the relationship between the two.   Overall impression: Overall I enjoyed reading the piece. Thank you for sharing.  A few Typos:marvelling at her cure neighbour: cute neighbour Proofread a few more times. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **  Rima...Happy Writing  !!!  A "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Super Power review...  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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