Wheel of Fortune [18+] My blog--I pull a card--if it doesn't speak to me...perhaps it is for you? |
Greetings, ridinghhood-p.boutilier ! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2019" , and your entry was previous to my own. First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. Title Great title for this piece! I've always been curious about things like this... My First Impression Fascinating! This is very cool, indeed. I could practically see the atoms and stardust vibrating and spinning, creating this mirage. Very clever piece! Punctuation/Grammar/Typos I have no suggestions at all! Your consistency of no punctuation whatsoever, works perfectly. Other Suggestions Absolutely not! Thoughts/Emotions I love this!!! I'm still seeing shimmering particals in my mind! I've been curious about this quantom thing for quite some time, but never persued it. It's sounds so very fascinating. My favorite lines... a traffic jam of stardust. Nicely written! Great piece! Have a great day and K e e p on W r i t i n g ! ~Cubby ") My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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