Hello!

Thanks for submitting this to our group for the review challenge, I was very impressed with it.

In terms of narrative, it jumps around some but the feelings expressed in it (rage, sorrow, self-loathing, dissatisfaction) all seep so naturally into one another. I liked the contrast there, and the way that the feelings left by certain memories trigger other memories almost instantly. It feels like looking back upon a real, and unforgiving timeline, culminating in the frustration of the present.

I also like that toward the end, you don't steer away from the more graphic images at the end when addressing self harm. I know that can be too much for some people, but I think it was a good visual to pair with the mounting tension at the end of the piece.

All in all, you did a great job. I'm glad to have read this, and I hope that writing this gave you at least a small bit of solace that you were looking for.

Sincerely,

Cat




















My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .