Hello!

Thanks for submitting this piece to our review challenge, it was certainly very interesting.

You covered a lot of topics in here that it was good to read about, such as maturing emotionally, coping with jealousy, and even parting ways with a former friend and the regrets that can be associated with that. It was a little strange to read about it with pets, but I think that made the story all the more unique.

The one thing that I would work on is cleaning up the tense and perspective. It's all in third person, obviously, but the use of pronouns seemed to get a little muddled, particularly toward the end, and there were a couple instances of you switching to the present tense. I got a little confused right there at the end, and had a tough time following the story.

I also would love to know where the name Orang came from, but that's just curiosity on my part.

All in all I think this was a solid story that was able to cover a lot of things in a short amount of time. Thanks again for sharing it!

Sincerely,

Cat


















My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .