Hey again!

I'm always so excited when I see your name show up on the review list for our Monthly Challenge. You've supplied so many quality pieces for us to review - and this is no exception.

I have to say that I'm really impressed with how coherent this poem is overall, especially since it's your first attempt at the form. (My first attempts at poetic forms never come out this cleanly.) I also really liked that you were able to squeeze that internal rhyme in there right at the end, tying the piece back around to its opening line.

The only thing that I wish had come through clearer was the message of the poem being about loneliness, which I don't think I would have gotten without the title. That being said, I don't know how you could have worked much more in, considering how strict the form is.

Overall, this was another spectacular piece, and I'm glad to have read it. Thanks again for submitting to our review challenge

Sincerely,

Cat




















My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .