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 What's Wrong With You Now? Open in new Window. [E]
The conversation I have with myself when someone asks this inevitable question.
by LeJenD' Author Icon
Review by Cat Voleur Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with Under Construction: MHWA  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.


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Hello,

Thank you for submitting this to the MHWA Review Challenge this month. I hope you don't mind me spamming you with reviews tonight, but I noticed you have a number of pieces on our list. If they're all this good, it looks like I'm in for a treat.

What I liked best about this piece was that it was cyclical. You start with a question being asked in dialogue and return to the same question being asked internally, illustrating a wide variety of feelings in between.

There was one line in particular I really liked:

Even more so now
since I removed the mask.


I thought the implications of this were just so powerful. Even though you're making progress in emotional honesty, people are asking you more and more if you're okay. It's sort of a negative reinforcement for a positive step, and I think that highlights a lot of the problems going on behind the scenes.

Thanks again for sharing this piece with us, and you'll be hearing more from me shortly.

Sincerely,

Cat



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This review was done as part of the MHWA May Review Challenge to promote awareness about the group, and May being Mental Health Awareness Month.



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