Hello again!

This piece, obviously, is less structured than the last one I read.

I don't think it reads as smoothly, being free form and jumping from one metaphor to the next in such a short space - but there is something undeniably appealing about the raw stream of consciousness and emotional honesty in the piece.

There were so many good fragments in here, that I really did want to read more. I only wish you had expanded more on some of these ideas - although perhaps that would be better suited to other pieces so as not to stretch this poem beyond its limits.

The line that really jumped out at me was this:



I would have loved to see more of this particular train of thought, and if you ever do decide to expand on it, I hope you'll let me know!

Overall it was an intriguing piece, and I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.

Sincerely,

Cat



















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