Hello!

I really loved the movement in this one. The meter and the rhyme scheme worked together perfectly to keep the eye flowing from one line easily into the next, and with such great rhythm!

The theme was also a lot of fun. Contrasts are something that I like playing with in fiction, but I don't think I could ever work so many perfect contrasts so seamlessly into such a short amount of space.

Usually this is the part where I'd highlight my favorite part of the piece, but I couldn't decide. So instead, I'm going to leave you with both of my favorite excerpts:



This rang really true for me, because it's one of those conflicting issues in life that I run into all the time. Once a problem becomes so big that it's out of your hands, the only thing left is to accept it. That's a small step, but somehow it's also the hardest thing to do, and it leaves you in a state where everything becomes one jumbled mess that seems huge and insignificant at the same time.



This one stuck with me for a much lighter reason. I have a friend who is so consistently late that we've just started telling him events are twenty minutes before they actually start - and he always shows up just in time.

There was something that was just so easy to relate to in this piece, and every line was its own little contrast that seems impossible, but that we really encounter as humans every day.

Thank you so much for sharing this piece!

Sincerely,

Cat
















My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .