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Review #4497044
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 Exercise in Settings Open in new Window. [E]
Extracting childhood memories
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Review by ruwth Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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May God bless both of us as we grow as writers together!


"Invalid Item" Open in new Window. has me reviewing your item today! Our topic of the week was about memoirs and we were to review an item from the genre: experience. I chose yours. *Wink*

Title and Brief Description:

I usually discuss these separately but, in this case, I think looking at them together is sufficient as it seems as though this is an exercise you might have done for a class. Normally, I want to see title and description lure readers in but for this item, you are using them to tell us what this item is.

Since you have also included that information at the start of your item, you might want to think about creating a fitting title and description for this piece now—and entice folks to check it out! *Wink*

The Main Course:

Although this item is not presented as a finished piece, everything except "I don't know why I remember this, but" has a finished sound to me. The punctuation and grammar might not be perfect but I don't care. It is fun to read and flows very well.


Summary:

Your "slice of life" took me back to my childhood. I loved your description of the voice inflection of mothers calling their children and I remember my dad's father had called him and his brothers in with a whistle.

Thanks for the memories...




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