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I Write In 2019 and 2024 to....  Open in new Window. [13+]
Lots of creative pursuits in 2019 and more in 2024 and beyond.
by 💙 Carly-wrimo 2024 Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "Fickle World" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Title:

Your current title "Fickle World" embodies the message of your poem and on its own would arouse my curiosity and make me want to see what you have written. In just two words it does exactly what a title is suppose to do.

The Main Course:

Your poem passed my read aloud test. This free style poem does not have a particularly poetic sound but it does have a good flow and the phrases break in such a way as to give some power to your poem's statement of truth.

I had only one small issue: decrepit. When the world abandons us, we are not left decrepit...cold and alone, perhaps.

Summary:

So, I would suggest replacing that one word but your message is true. It was exactly what I needed to be reminded of today. I recently accepted an office on the board of our local senior center and find myself dealing with the fickle public right now. *Facepalm*



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