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These comments are just one person’s opinion and are given in the hope you find something useful

First Impressions
My first impression was that this is a gentle story, two old men, typical curmudgeonly types start off bickering and end up organising to spend time together, each allowing the other to see their loneliness.


Plot
The story unfolds as one of the characters brings a better quality bird seed to the place where the other character has been feeding the pigeons. The guy who was there first feels he has a sort of monopoly on these pigeons. A conversation takes place between them and a solution, amenable to both is agreed upon.


Characters
There are no discernible differences between the two characters. I don’t necessarily think that’s too important in such a short story but maybe a little description may have added something. I think they’ll make great friends, but much of their time will be spent arguing about the little things.


Climax
The last couple of lines were lovely, both expressed a desire for companionship, exposing a vulnerability which is quite profound.



Parting Comments
I loved the story, the humour and the gentleness. Thank you for sharing.




Reviewed by Sumojo