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 Just another love story.  Open in new Window. [13+]
Abigail meets the love of her life but there's one thing that changes everything.
by Starx Author Icon
Review by Sumojo Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with Under Construction: MHWA  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Thanks for sharing ‘Just another love story’, and welcome to WdC. I hope you enjoy being here and you get the encouragement to write more. The story has promise, it is a topical one, that of on line dating, getting to know someone before actually meeting. Of course it’s fraught with danger isn’t it? The actual meeting is often disappointing.
I found the story a little confusing, but maybe Abigail herself was confused?
Try to watch your tenses they talked for multiple hours, even days, she has never met anyone like him. should read had never...Maybe choose a different word for multiple, perhaps numerous?
...dating app, but why not don’t forget the question mark.
Try and experiment with different size fonts and double space your paragraphs so that the text is easier to read.
Thank you for sharing your love story, I hope Abigail finds her true love on line some time.
Well done, keep on writing.

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