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Hi, I'm reviewing this for the Mental Health Writers Alliance. *Smile*

First off, after the line "She could feel the expectations in the air," there's a linespace randomly thrown in that I don't think you meant to be there. *Pthb*

That aside, I really liked this! I found myself instantly drawn in and wondering very much what exactly everyone has against prefects. Lyn's inner dilemma about what she should do regarding her roommate was really well done, and I like that she chose to help her out, at least this once. (Also, considering the river prank, I feel like Melanie was getting off lucky here. *Pthb*)

Great job! *Heart*
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