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Hi, I'm reviewing this for the Mental Health Writers Alliance. *Smile*

It was a little difficult to read because it felt like one big wall of text. But I still really liked reading it! I wished there was more when I got to the end, because I feel invested in Kristoff's and Ysabelle's adventures checking out the town. (Without Malissa. Malissa sounds extremely annoying and I think you got her character down really well.) I loved your description of Ysabelle, she sounds really interesting. Also, there's a ton of like...magic/otherworldly vibes, which I like.

I just wish there was more to it because it feels a bit like it ends too abruptly. But I still like it, great job! *Heart*
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