The Snow Maiden [E] Fairy Tale |
Hello! I will be your reviewer for the time being. I am a no-nonsense reviewer. I will tell you like it is but will also point out the good things I see. just a bit about me. Okay, let's begin. "He dared to make a wish -- but he kept it to himself for fear that if he said it out loud the wind might come and whisk it away, and then it would never come true." I like the imagery of this line and it was very well written. The poem was excellent as well! "The atmosphere was midnight blue and freckled with silver stars." Just a small thing, but earlier you said that the stars were blue. Nice ending, I was hoping you were going to go there, but that last part I had to read twice. She was a swan and then he kissed her lips and tasted death. when did she turn back into a 'human'? Very nicely done, I liked the story very much, except for that one part, it was very easy to follow, your hunter was pretty well rounded out for being a short story. When you post stuff on here sometimes you have to go through and hit return after every paragraph, it's just easier to read that way, just a thought. anyway, thank you for inviting me into your world, keep on writing! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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