Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Greetings, The Peanut Writer! This is actually pretty good! I found this on Read & Review, so I wasn't sure what to expect, but I did enjoy it. However, if I hadn't just recently watched a couple of Harry Potter movies, I wouldn't have a clue what this was about, other than some wizard girl getting teased by her wizard friends! Melda sounds like a decent enough soul, and her 'friends' have no right to treat her that way. You did a nice job of showing that she has to upstage them in order to get them to like her. Alas, such is the plight of a young wizard. But at least she has Walnut, who sounds like a pretty neat creature that even I'd like to have as a companion! Well done, my friend! The spelling and grammar was flawless, and the whole piece flowed smoothly! 'from a rock golem' (nice!) Kee ponw ritin gon, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here! Oh, wait! You HAVE been here before! I'm so sorry you lost your account info, and if I come across anything in my reviews I'll definitely let you know ASAP! Halloween the Echidna, right? Good luck, PW!
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