Hi SidSquid,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about your bus ride home after your first day of school and how you were judged before the other students even got to know you. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You abruptly switch from the present to the past tense in the piece. You need to keep your tenses consistent to keep your writing clear for your reader.

You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.