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 Review #4513737 |
 | Snow White 2035  [18+] All the truth about mirrors and apples  |
| (4.5)| It is my pleasure to read your story and give you a review. Welcome to WDC! You really summed up the Snow White story using up to date high tech devices. Good job about bringing out the truth about the mirror and apples.   Reader's Reaction: We all know the story about Snow White, but with a few future tech changes, you showed how she was found after the queen's plan to kill her failed. You wrote about a futuristic take on Snow White I'm not sure if Disney would approve. It definitely would make things harder for Snow White to hide without the evil queen finding out. Characters/Dialog: The characters are changed up a little, but all in all a great job.The dialog was well done. Don't you believe in quotation marks? It would make things easier for your readers.  Emotion/Mood/Atmosphere: The emotion revolved around belligerent, scornful on the evil queen's part while Snow White just seemed innocent, cautious to a point until she got the new iPhone that gave away her position to the queen.The mood/atmosphere gave me a feeling of how Snow White must have felt like, locked away, pretending she was dead. She missed her boyfriend and needed to communicate with him. You created an atmosphere of happiness up to a point, but Snow White was lonely. You gave great description of backgrounds and settings, as well as showing the different characters and events.  Plot & Pace: The plot revolved around the truth about mirrors and apples in the Snow White story. Structure - setting & Imagery: The narrative structure showed the content of the Snow White story in the future referring to the dramatic action as well as the plot, the key conflicts, main characters, setting and events. Favorite Lines: "Once upon a time there were a king and a queen, and they had a daughter, whom everyone called Snow White. The queen died under strange circumstances, the investigation of her death was suspended in a strange way, and soon the king married again. The new wife was not a simple jane with a pumped up ass, she had a lot of hidden talents and some special equipment, among other things. Overall Impression/Conclusion: You followed along with your changes dealing with the future Snow White 2035. Describing the new wife as you did gave the reader the heads up on what to expect.The conclusion was what I hope for. I wasn't sure though, so good job with keeping me guessing.  WriteOn!  Thank you for sharing your work with us! Jeannie☃️    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 11/09/2019 @ 3:30pm EST