Hi Racer,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Thomas will get out the door without too many questions from his mother. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a boy who is going out for a run and convince his mother everything is finished before he leaves. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:


1)I have a cross country meet tomorrow and all my homework is done."-There should be a comma after "tomorrow".

2)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.