Hi Scooby,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what is going on in the Egyptian exhibit. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a museum administrator finds something strange about the Egyptian exhibit as he is getting ready to leave. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The museum administrator comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.