Hi lea,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is intense and full of passion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a woman who has her first night of passion with the man she loves. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.