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| (5.0)| Hujambo, Hiker Angel! Hmm. Or should I say WOW! I thought this was great, HA! I love how you used that prompt, and to be honest, I honestly thought that Mark was going to turn into a werewolf and eat Paul just for his ignorance! Boy, was I wrong! You took me down a whole different trail and ended it with an extremely unique twist! Bravo, my friend! The dialogue was excellent, the spelling and grammar superb (which in itself kind of surprised me since you have such an extensive vocabulary!), and the action was rolling practically from the start to the end! And using Mark's catch phrase was the perfect way to end this! I'm seriously impressed! I only wish sugarglider58 would have picked this as a Daily Winner!  I do have one tiny suggestion: "Paul?" he said in an exploratory voice. (for some reason, that word 'exploratory' just doesn't work for me. I think you could without that entire speech tag altogether and it would still work just fine, but that's just my own humble opinion, for what it's worth!) Otherwise,  !Kee ponw ritin gon, Hiker Angel! And just so you know, I'm going to nominate this for a Quill Award because this is such a cool piece and I'm such a cool guy! 
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