Hi Madeleine,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of wonder and excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a crowd of people involved in some exciting communal ritual. The reader is wondering why the crowd is so excited and transfixed. They will read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.