Hi NOBODYLEARNS,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well.The reader is wondering if the speaker will be caught by the aliens. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a spy who lies their way onto an alien vessel in order to gather information. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a few structural issues that need your attention:

1)That was a really bad one and you knew it.-There should be a comma after "one".

2)But after he calmed down-There should be a comma after "But".

3)You switch from the past to the present tense in this story. You should keep your tense consistent to keep your writing clear for your reader.

3)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view. Great job.