Hi Holly,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is light. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Akala will find a special treat for Callie. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a bear cub gets help from an owl when she tries to find a special treat for her mother. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. Akale speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)birthday but she kept that secret too.-There should be a comma after "birthday".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.