Hi Zarathecookie,
This is a wonderful essay. The tittle is enigmatic and attention grabbing. The reader knows that they will be learning about your best friend but not much more. They will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about when your family moved and you started to have trouble with the best friend you had in your old home. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)february-This should begin with a capital letter.
You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
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