Hi Miss V,
This is a wonderful piece. The tone is full of wonder and joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will actually get to enjoy supper with Jesus. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, someone finds joy in trusting completely in Jesus' love. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The speaker speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)and I caught my breath,-"caught" should be "catch".

2)“thank you,-"thank" should begin with a capital letter.

The piece is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.