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 All I Needed was Attention! Open in new Window. [E]
Sometimes, what we all need is a little attention...
by Soul mate's call Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Delight* I liked the exclamation energy of the title. I got the impression that it was vital to be recognized. The red font adds to the vibe too, like a little anger or frustration.

*Burstr* I enjoyed reading this powerful expression with its fine rhyme and flow. The process of going through depression and the doctor's words are too often the result when we want to talk and get the anger and sadness moving..to really just be heard. The line about learning about lie is so sad and really struck home. *Thumbsup*

*Burstr* I think the sentiments you express will be relevant to many and that you are not alone can be uplifting. I can see this applying to all ages as even kids act out, wanting something they are not getting in terms of real attention.

*Quill*I don't think you need exclamations on each line. also I think the word "told" should be "said" or add the word "me".

*Star*Your poem has an effective soundscape too. It was fun to read aloud. Nice satire.
Thanks for sharing your vision and craft at WDC! Happy writing and I hope you find a home here. *Delight*

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