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![]() ![]() ![]() Good morning, Shadow Prowler-Spreading Love ![]() So, let's get started. I normally review fiction, and use a review template that discusses my views on what makes for good fiction, and compare your work to my beliefs about the Craft. That doesn't work so well for true stories, but I'll try to follow the general format. PRESENTATION: This aspect deals with the first impression your story makes when a reader clicks on the title. Call it the cosmetics. I'll be looking at abstract items from text density to scene dividers in a effort to ferret out any unfortunate habits that might cause a reader to move on without actually reading anything; before you can dazzle him with your show, you have to get him into the tent! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() This is where I'd normally talk about the STORY, though in a factual anecdote like this, "story" doesn't really enter into it. This is a fun and informative tale of what drew you to writing, and has kept you here for the long haul. There is no story to make up, but merely a telling of the facts, so I can't judge your imagination from this. The way you present these facts in an entertaining narrative that holds the reader's attention is excellent, however, and I have no problem with hanging the full ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() MECHANICS: Whether you're writing fact or fiction, prose or poetry, the "holy grail" that you're striving for is immersion. This is an area that no author, myself included, ever wants to talk about: I've done all this work, and you want to argue over a comma?" But those commas are important. What you're really doing as a writer is weaving a magic spell around your reader, and your reader wants you to succeed. He wants to escape his mundane world for a period, and lose himself in your creation. Errors in spelling and grammar, typos, "there" vs. "their" issues, use of words inconsistent with their actual meanings, all yank him out of his immersion while he backtracks to re-read and puzzle out what you meant to say. This is never good, and this is the section that deals with that. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() In your subtitle, you say that your purpose for writing is to "elect" a reaction. I would guess that you mean "elicit, as in bring forth or attract. We elect presidents and dog-catchers, and sometimes we get them backward! "... I could pick up that the weather was doing..." My guess would be "pick up what the weather was doing?" The ellipsis (three dots, usually, though not always implying someone's voice trailing off), as here: gasps...all. Under strict grammar rules, they are separated by spaces, as . . . That rule has fallen somewhat by the wayside as the wrapping text used on computers and word processors will often split the dots onto two separate lines, causing quite a bit of confusion. But however you choose to write them, they are always followed by a space... thusly. SUMMARY: ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() It's good to see a new member wade in and put a group together. I admire that kind of initiative. Most, I think, join, then sit back and wait to see what happens. I think you'll be a great success here, and an asset to the site because your approach is to make things happen. Just don't forget to have the fun. So many young, enthusiastic writers get so caught up in the daily word count, the quest for publication, and the often conflicting advice of other writers that they forget to enjoy the journey. You may or may not become the next Big Celebrity Author, but you will always have the experience. Make sure it's a good one! Read well, and write better, ![]() ![]() ![]()
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