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 Welcome Kirby to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" and "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" !  I was drawn to the title as I enjoy legends and fantasy. This short story is like a summary of a potential longer tale. I liked the concept of the man on a journey and becoming a legend but I am also curious to hear more about his trip.The description of the man with his gear is vivid and gives me the impression of a bard or explorer.  I wonder if, instead of "village's people" you could simply say "villagers" and also the phrase beginning with "being tired...." should come before "decided to..."The word "amoung" should be "among" I think.   I wondered in your description of the mountain, what exactly "wonderfully dangerous" looked liked. I think specific details would make the passage more vital. Is the traveller from the same village near the mountain, with the special powers? I take it he is bored with life near the mountain. I wanted to know more, like his name and more about the towns folks and powers.  If he documented everything but no one saw him, how do they know he wrote things?  This is a good idea for a longer tale. Thanks for sharing your vision. Enjoy WDC! I hope you find a home here. If you like Fantasy, you might like "Fantasy and Science Fiction Society" eyestar
   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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