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 Beautiful Lady  Open in new Window. [E]
scary short story (less than 300 words)
by Chenincook Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello there, Chenincook!
As a lover, reader, writer, and judge of horror ("SCREAMS!!!" Open in new Window.), I thought this was really good.
You did a nice job of describing what this 'visitor' was doing to you, how she was 'playing you', and urging you to do things you normally wouldn't do. And giving us that bit of backstory of moving into that older house (which 'Mom' claimed was the cause of your worries) was good too.
But 'twas that ending that made this shine! Belladonna. Also known as Devil's Berries and Deadly Nightshade!
And to have said spirit kill your mother cuz she didn't believe you was perfect!
BTW, I also like how you brought the story full circle with 'Belladonna'! *ThumbsUpL*
Flawless spelling and grammar, and considering how short it is, I thought it was excellent!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Chenincook! Welcome to WdC, and if you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.
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