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 |  | Tactile Memory  [ASR] The body remembers.  |
| (5.0)  Welcome to WdC from the "Newbie Welcome Wagon" Good morning, Ivaylo Stefkov , and welcome to WdC. For the record, my real name is Jack Tyler, and I am a former steampunk author who has transitioned to horror, but I try to review a wide variety of styles and genres. Even some poetry. Most of it goes right over my head, as I freely admit that I lack the subtlety to catch the nuance and simile that most of it uses to make its esoteric points. But this one speaks to me like a biographical work. I, too, have those burns and blemishes that are like commemorative tattoos celebrating a life well-lived. There are no hidden meanings here to puzzle over. It is simply a wordless autobiography told by a body that remembers the living. That last stanza is the cherry on top. One area I always take the time to address is the mechanics of the piece. Whether you're writing fact or fiction, prose or poetry, the "holy grail" that you're striving for is immersion. This is an area that no author, myself included, ever wants to talk about: I've done all this work, and you want to argue over a comma?" But those commas are important. What you're really doing as a writer is weaving a magic spell around your reader, and your reader wants you to succeed. He wants to escape his mundane world for a period, and lose himself in your creation. Errors in spelling and grammar, typos, "there" vs. "their" issues, use of words inconsistent with their actual meanings, all yank him out of his immersion while he backtracks to re-read and puzzle out what you meant to say. This is never good. I've read for grammar several times, and the only hiccup I can find is at the beginning of the second stanza, where you say "I got a pinky..." To be strictly grammatical, you should say "I've got..." or "I have..." The fact is that, in poetry, you may have phrased it this way for dramatic effect, and I'm not going to penalize you for it. I tend not to make assumptions about people, but your bio says you are from Bulgaria, and if English isn't your first language, this is all the more impressive. Bottom line, this is beautiful, and I thank you for sharing. You have a wonderful voice that deserves to be heard. If I can leave you with one thought to take with you, let it be this: Don't forget to have the fun! So many young and/or beginning writers get so caught up in the daily word count, the quest for publication, and the often conflicting advice of other writers that they forget to enjoy the journey. You may or may not become the next Big Celebrity Author, but you will always have the experience. Make sure it's a good one! Read well, and write better,  JackIf you're looking for a comfortable refuge to discuss writing in all of its varied and wonderful forms, take a look at this group and see if it's for you. We'd love to have you!
 My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 03/16/2020 @ 3:43pm EDT