Hi Sijil !

I found your poem on the "Read a Newbie" page and it's my pleasure to send you a review.

VOICE, TONE, DICTION:

The voice is first person, the tone is pensive and regretful, and the diction is great.

SOUND PATTERNS:

I liked the rhyming scheme coupled with the unconventional meter.

ERRORS:

Not really an error, but I would write out the word "and" instead of using the "&" where it says "into the red & orange..."

SUGGESTIONS:

Some of the punctuation could be cleaned up, like in places there's a period but it's breaking up the thought so it shouldn't have a period, it can just flow.

FAVORITE LINES:

"A gem of light that drew me in"

OVERALL IMPRESSION:

I know you said in the introduction that you wrote this when you developed a crush, but the content is so cryptic (which I love!) that it could be talking about so many different things besides love. For instance, the first time I read through it, it sounded to me like it was referencing depression or mental illness, because of the "only to awaken empty-handed". I really appreciate poetry with multiple interpretations or meanings. There's always the original intent of the writer's, but if it's vague enough and colorful enough to be perceived in a few different ways, that's excellent writing in my opinion, and you've done that here! Thanks for the wonderful read.

Thanks for sharing your talent with us, and keep writing!