Dear Shadow Prowler-Spreading Love – Welcome to Writing.com. I am glad you are a part of this amazing writing community now. I enjoyed reading "Lucky Bunny "  and I am glad to offer my review of your story.
 
  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
Introducing Lydia, the reader is given the perfect snapshot to understand the whimsical world of this precocious little girl. The action is great as we are introduced to a contest that will put to test our heroine’s life values.
 
  THEME
 
The theme for your story for me was the human frailty that challenges every child’s moral compass, from the simplest choices of what to keep and what to throw away to the more difficult understanding of what is stealing.
 
  STRUCTURE
 
Your story is written from the third person through the perspective of the main character Lydia. The structure works extremely well and the reader is continually shown the action. The balance between narrative, scene setting and action is extremely well done. The descriptions are compelling and fresh.

 
  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The images, scenes and actions are wonderful and my favorite moment was:

“Suddenly, her eyes lit up as a brilliant idea took root in her mind. She carefully set her bunny back in its spot and opened her bedroom door. Her jade eyes darted up and down the narrow hall, insuring no one was around. Quick as a blink, she made her way two doors down and lightly tapped the door. She smiled when no one answered. “

The description of Lydia in this paragraph still moves the story forward, but I am given to know even more about her delightful humanness. Her world’s reality becomes more my reality.
 
 
  SUGGESTIONS
 
Everything about your story is wonderful. I love the detail you use in each scene and the tone and energy makes your story a delight to read. I was not aware of any edits or corrections that needed to be made and loved the story just the way you have written it.

  IN SUMMARY
 
"Lucky Bunny "  is a fun look at a little girl’s challenge with making the right choices in life. Her deviation from the right path could have calamity written all over it, but seriously, is life really like that? Write On!
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
 

You responded to this review 03/22/2020 @ 1:59pm EDT

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