Hi, ajw708, I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I discovered "Invalid Item"  on the technology genre page.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the store owner. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

I like: I like the smooth flow of the plot from the beginning to the climax. I also like the way the story ended because it made me smile.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the wishes were granted.








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