Hi WinterSnow !

I found your poem on the Read a Newbie page and I'm happy to send you a review today.

INITIAL REACTION:

I definitely relate to this, and I think it's a feeling we all share right now. It's imperative to hope for the light at the end of the tunnel even if we can't see it right now.

ERRORS:

Remove the comma in "No, light at the end of this tunnel"
"I can't see nothing" is a double negative and should be "I can't see anything"
All of the instances of "its" should have an apostrophe to make them "it's"

SUGGESTIONS:

I feel like this poem is slightly unfinished. You introduced some great similes with the land of milk and honey, and land of misery and despair, but then you stopped cold and didn't elaborate. I want to read more about the misery and despair! What makes it so? The milk and honey simile was great and I'd like to see more similes and explanations. Yes, the narrator is in the tunnel and full of despair, but why? How did they get there? What can they do to triumph and persevere, and what obstacles do they still face?

FAVORITE LINES:

"The darkness was chased away by the light"
I love that visual!

OVERALL IMPRESSION:

There are good metaphors, similes and imagery in this piece. Your creative flair is apparent in the whole poem, and you definitely have a way with words. This is a promising draft but I personally feel it needs more, to flesh out the middle part. There's so much depth here and the content is very relatable. I greatly enjoyed reading this and I hope to read more of your work!

Thanks for sharing your talent with us, and keep writing!