Dear Penelope – Welcome to Writing.com. I am glad you are a part of this amazing writing community now. I was compelled by your clear writing style to read "Invisibility"  and I am glad to offer my review of your essay.
 
  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
My first hope is to answer one of your questions…yes, people will read your work. Especially in this community of writers, many of whom are going through the challenges you are experiencing. They will with sincere love attempt to relate to what you are communicating. Not all, but most of your readers will be empathetic, especially with the words, images, thoughts and hopes that you have obviously written autobiographically. What you have been suffering is common to all of us who write and while the pain is often unbearable, you have commonality with a huge number of very talented people here on WDC.
 
  THEME
 
The theme of your essay is about being on the edge of life where pain , sorrow, loss and fear grip the human soul. Can one find enough hope and care in one’s community to help one past the inner struggles that can hold one back from the human engagement we need to strive in life? One's hope is that one can indeed have hope.
 
  STRUCTURE
 
Your essay flows in a way that helps both the reader and writer develop a closer relationship. Everything about the structure allows for your writing to be transparent and compelling.

 
  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
Your essay is a revelation of the deepest feelings that one may have to endure as they suffer loss. Through it all one of the highlights for me in reading your piece was:

“With no one around , scenes flash thru my mind like images from old movie clips. Though each one stabs through my soul I have almost become dependent on them. Probably similar to an addict, who knows the drugs will kill them but needs to go through the ritual for its all that is left. “

While every word and image is about the sorrows, hurts and pains of life internalized, your writing demonstrates a strong desire to get at what may be at the root of your despair and bring it out into the light. The questions of course are going to come up for your reader as well as they begin to internalize the same struggles. While we, your readers, may not be the same issues that weigh in your life, our PTSD’s and regrets, losses and sorrows are just as real to our souls. The reality of a life lived to its full is always the possibility of untold calamity and loss that debilitates the one who is left behind to live on.
 
 
  SUGGESTIONS
 
You have formed the first draft of a powerful essay. With a few minor edits, if your writing trends towards wanting to help others through what you have had to endure, this would be an excellent article to help others. My thought is that you may not be ready to take on the work of polishing your piece at this time, but I would be glad to help with that if you wish to do more with your essay.

All writers are in the same conflict you find yourself in. I have been blessed to write through a lot of my depression, regrets, emotional and mental health problems. I have seen my relationships healed and a reasonable amount of joy with the full knowledge that all I enjoy right now may be gone tomorrow. But there is no question…I must write to keep that balance…to keep my feet walking out the front door into an uncertain world every day.

The one suggestion I have then is – write more. Keep writing. Keep putting your writing out there on this site. It can be very healing. And if someone is jerky to you here…and sometimes it does happen, know that there are many caring people in this community for writers who will support you and your work always.

  IN SUMMARY
 
"Invisibility"  is an essay that seeks to explore the full depths of how one may overcome the emotional and physical hurts one may endure because of the loss of loved ones and friendships. In the writing of the piece I can sense that some answers to how to “go on” and “endure” life’s toughest challenges have been uncovered. Thank you for sharing your gift.
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
 

You responded to this review 03/24/2020 @ 11:51pm EDT

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