Hi there SB Musing

Thank you for entering last month's "Short Shots" contest. As one of the judges, I'm offering the following comments on your story.

I thought this was quite a challenging prompt, with all the makings of a nightmarish dreamscape of some kind; so I was keen to see what other, maybe less obvious, interpretations might come forward. Yours was a true original and I loved how you went for it right from the off. Setting, characters, fantasy - all wrapped up together with those startling prompt visuals in your first few blistering paragraphs.

Then, as your story developed and they moved outside, I thought you held the atmosphere well and deftly caught the shift of power from one to the other. I thought your word choices were excellent and your detailed touches expertly done. My one reservation would be that the piece is more an opening chapter than a complete short story - a key element in the contest, after all - and I have to confess that I felt a tad let down when it kinda fizzled out for me at the end, especially with another 450 words left in your locker. Nevertheless, you're a writer of exceptional talent and I look forward to reading more of your stuff.

For now, I hope you find these comments helpful and wish you every success for your future writing!

Best regards,
dee

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .