The Old Veteran's Friends [E] The Old Veteran remembers his friends from the war who never came home |
Greetings, Sum1's Home! I discovered this on the Read & Review page and decided to review it. First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. What I Liked I'm quite patriotic and my family has served in the military, so this poem drew me in. My uncle served in Vietnam, my father-in-law in Normandy, and other members also served though not in a war. I've lost no one to war, but I could have. I know others who did. It's heart-wrenching. Thank you for sharing this beautifully written reminder of those who have died fighting for our freedom. Suggestions to Consider The rhymes and the meter weren't always right-on, but this still worked for me. In fact, for some odd reason, I could hear Johnny Cash's voice as I read through this with his guitar playing in the background as he read your words and it sounded perfect. I know that's weird, but true! Final Thoughts This is a great piece and a great tribute to those who not only lost their lives, but the soldiers who carry the memories of their comrades. Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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