Merry's 14th Birthday Party [E] My pet dachshund gets spoilt rotten on his birthday |
Greetings, HollyMerry! I discovered this gem in Random Reviews and am so glad I did! First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. What I Liked I thoroughly enjoyed this read! It made me smile all the way through! Your writing style is amazing. Great flow, tone, and imagery! What a delight to read something through the eyes of a dachshund who uses a doggy wheelchair for his back legs. Such a positive story! Your visuals were awesome, for example: I got out of my bed dancing with my front paws, exciting as always for another day. and I played with my blue ball that has dog biscuits hidden inside, manically chasing it about the room. And my favorite is: I managed to relax despite the thunder as I was given some doggy reiki whilst listening to pet calming music. Suggestions to Consider In a few spots I noticed: my Mummy where the M didn't need capping. Paragraph 4:goats milk goat's milk or goat milk. Final Thoughts I adore this piece! You are definitely a gifted writer and I hope to read more of your work in the future! Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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