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Hi! I'm reviewing this for "Harry Potter and the Writers' Spell " . I'm on the Ravenclaw team. It's not looking good, but we're having fun, so there's that. Also, to boost points, I need to include some references to Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban, so don't give me a dementor's kiss for some randomly thrown in references. As with all reviews, take what you find useful and what isn't, feel free to ignore it rather than putting a crucio spell (which causes unbearable pain) on me. I simply beg the Minister of Magic to forgive me of any offenses as this is all intended to be helpful and not hurtful. I found this link you might find useful. https://www.wikihow.com/Write-an-Acrostic-Poem I like what you're working with, but it seems more like sentences than a poem. There doesn't have to be a rhyme or rhythm scheme to make it a poem, but it does need to flow. Maybe you can use the Aguamenti to summon some water to make it flow. (Don't lock me up in Azkaban for my horrible jokes. ) I like that you capitalized the first letter--many poems don't capitalize the first letter of each line, but for an acrostic, I think it's a good idea (or maybe a requirement--not 100% sure). Consider putting the first letter in bold as well, though not sure that will make it better. It might detract from the poetic look. Consider throwing in more references. For example, the first line could read "He is half wizard, half Muggle." Though I also like "He is half wizard, half man." To me, really what is normal? The 1st 4 lines tell us things about Harry and that's good. I like that. But the 5th line, the Y, doesn't really give us anything new. You name his friends, then say yes, these are his friends. Give us more about their friendship or their lives. Maybe, "You'll find them in and out of trouble" or "You can count on them if you're in danger"? That one rhymes with "Granger" in the line above, so if you do that, consider rhyming the last 2 lines in the 2nd stanza. I prefer the 1st stanza over the 2nd one because you keep us in their world in the 1st one whereas in the second, we are then transported to Hollywood. It's like the Apparate spell was used on me. But it's funny that I prefer the 1st stanza, but my favorite line is in the 2nd stanza. lol I really like "Potions and spells classes they take." To me, that's the most poetic line in the whole poem and so it's my favorite. I really like what you've got here as a base, but I know you can do so much more with it! Keep working on this. I can't wait to see what else you can do with it--rhyming or not. Good luck and thank you for sharing this with us! It's a fun poem and I'm glad I came across it! Keep writing and have a wonderful week! Now, I must take off on my Firebolt broom. I have other things to do! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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